This story is too cute. After talking about story endings in class last night, I see now how this story ends with a universal truth that everyone can relate to, rather than simply ending the action of the story.
I also noticed the action is told in presence tense and the backstory in past tense. I don't know if all narratives are written that way, but it feels engaging when I read it.
Very good points. And the tenses issue -- you are right about how present and past are used, and while not all narratives are written this, it is a good, simple way to organize them.
This story has a much more fluid voice than the adoption story. I assume because of the voice of the boy in the interview (?) and I like that she conveys that to us. This story also ends with an unknown outcome, but it's easier to handle, a smaller life issue, than Davion's situation.
This story is too cute. After talking about story endings in class last night, I see now how this story ends with a universal truth that everyone can relate to, rather than simply ending the action of the story.
ReplyDeleteI also noticed the action is told in presence tense and the backstory in past tense. I don't know if all narratives are written that way, but it feels engaging when I read it.
- Amanda
Very good points. And the tenses issue -- you are right about how present and past are used, and while not all narratives are written this, it is a good, simple way to organize them.
ReplyDelete" I don't want something that looks like it's been bought on a budget." Ladykiller! This kid knows at least one universal truth.
ReplyDeleteThe descriptions of Sarah and the items in the store are effective. In a very small space the writer makes me believe Austin made the right choice.
The ending. Oh my God, I love it.
ReplyDeleteThis story has a much more fluid voice than the adoption story. I assume because of the voice of the boy in the interview (?) and I like that she conveys that to us. This story also ends with an unknown outcome, but it's easier to handle, a smaller life issue, than Davion's situation.